I went to Amazon and peeked at the "Look Inside" of the book. I thought about the attention span of that age group as I read. Frankly, nothing interesting happens in that part of the book, although the book is billed as an interesting paranormal story. Maybe it eventually gets exciting, however, her publisher did this writer a great disservice by not offering her more editorial guidance about capturing attention at the get go. Or maybe it's just me.
I told my mother what I thought and explained the writing process to her. A first darft in one week is not so incredible when you consider the revising that's necessary to turn it into something people will want to read. That doesn't happen in a week.
I got my mother though. I sent her an early, still-shabby revision of Incidental Daughter. As rough as it was, she couldn't put it down and was up until five in the morning trying to finish it. I don't think that would have happened with my first draft. Ah, parents.